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{April 2, 2008}   JEEVAN MRITYU

Sapno ka dhundhla kohra

chhant kar hi rah dikhata hai,

mrityu hans alingan karti

jab jeevan yun thukrata hai.

par phir bhi sab jeena chahein

kyun marne se daar lagta hai?

jeevan chhanbhangur hai phir bhi

ye apne paas bulata hai.

Katra katra jeene se to

achcha hai maar hi jana,

kyun aisa kahne vala bhi

par mrityu se katrata hai?

Shaswat hai keval mrityu

jeevan bas palkon ka sapna,

par ye sapna hi aage badh

ummeedon ko apnata hai.

mrityu sthirta lati hai

jeevan asthir kar jata hai

par mrityu manthar gativihin

jeevan chalta hi jata hai!!!!



satyadarshi kunal says:

nice composition..
in reply- Mritu se jo ghabrata hai, wo jeeteji mar jata hai
mrityu toh ek atal satya hai, jeevan hai ek dharm,
mrityu k aalingan ko thukrana hai ek bhram.
mrityu k mukur me jeevan ko tum dekho,
markar jeena kisey kehte hain, sambhav ho toh seekho.
Mrityu se jo ghabrata hai, wo jeeteji mar jata hai.
i wish i could see some more creations of urs



Jitender Singh says:

simply a gr8, deep, and very meaningful poem ….in fact an intelligent work.
Keep it up.

regds

Jitender Singh



Mrityu par itni achi kavita padhkar kahne ka man karta tha ki “Jaldi m** Jao”.. Par kabhi nahi kah sakta. Kahunga ki Iswar tumhe lambi umar de ( such that we can read more such poems :P )



achhi kavita hai..
[mrityu hans alingan karti

jab jeevan yun thukrata hai.]

iske bare mein main kuchh kahunga..

jinhe jindagi se muhhabat ho jati hai
o bahut dur tak mukam banate hain..
mout har kosis karti hai unko bulane ki
par o apne liye mukkamal jahan banate hain

har koi jeevan se thake udas ho ye jaruri nahi
fir bhi mout apni reet nibhati hai..
unko himmat or bulandi par chabuk chalati hai..
jinme jine ki bahut hi tammanna baki hai
unko bhi apne sath le jati hai..

ye mrityu ka kaisa rang hai ,main samajh nahi paya…???
mout se meri jang jari hai,jindagi mujhe bahut pyari hai..

Regards



Sapno ka dhundhla kohra
chhant kar hi rah dikhata hai,
mrityu hans alingan karti
jab jeevan yun thukrata hai.

Bahut sunder poem hai. mere taraf s ekuch, abhi abhi likha hai :-)

Jeevan hastaa
yun hi machalta
apni gati mein
rahon ko roundta
dhool udata
chalta hi jata hai
per kya kabhi
zindagi mout se
jeet pata hai?



Bhav says:

good one

and please excuse my simple comment as i m not as poetic as u or other people who commented before me…

but i m a believer of life and i always feel life is very powerful too



shweta says:

@Kunal
thnx bro finally u spared sm wrds [:P]m honoured 2 ve u here.

@sonu bhaiya
poem is nthng its ur blessngs whch makes it gud.

@prem sir
aji bol hi dete!mar javan gud khake!!!! bt nahi ………..mujhe hi marne chale the…[:(]

@arun
dubara active hone ki lakh lakh badhaiyan

@rewa di
yun lagta hai ki hum jeevan ke aur
aap mrtyu ki vakil bani hui hain[:P]
par jo bhi ho………instantaneous poet hoti ja rahi hain aap

@bhav
ur simple comments r really admirable boss……dnt say all ths…..nd ya…m a believer of life itself…..shayad concluding lines pe dhyan nahi gaya apka.

nd thnx a lot to all for responding…….ur comments make the blog wrth wrtng in……



Rewa says:

Vaqeel sahiba, aap kijiye vaqalati, abhi aage ka stanza nahi dala hai….jab dalungi to kahoge zindagi aapki hamsafar nikli…. ;)



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